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The graph below shows the regional household recycling rates in the UK, France and Germany from the years 2005-2015.

The graph below shows the regional household recycling rates in the UK, France and Germany from the years 2005-2015.
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The graph above shows the changes in recycling
level
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 in e households for different countries in a decade.
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,
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the UK and Germany the rate of reproduction increased solidly, but
recycling
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the recycling
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 rate
of
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 France decreased gradually over the years.
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end
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 of the
period
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 UK became
the
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dominant.
Firstly
, the UK showed
the
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 slow increase between 2005 and 2007, and it did not change until 2009, but after that, it illustrated
the
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a
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suddenly
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 increase from 40
percentage
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 to approximately 55
percentage
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 between 2009 and 2011, and in 2015 it got over
the
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60
percentage
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.
Secondly
, Germany showed
the
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a
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 stably
grow
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 until 2009, it got nearly 35
percentages
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,
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rises
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 of 15. After that,
reproduction
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the reproduction
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 speed in domestic waste increased and it went to approximately 45 in 2 years. In
last
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the last
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period
 it went to nearly 55.
Finally
, France had 2
period
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.
First
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The first
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 one was between 2005 and 2013. In
this
period
 remanufacturing rate dropped gradually to 30 from 50. In
last
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the last
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period
 it got up to 40. In 2005 France was dominant, but
end
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 of
period
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 it was the
last
 one
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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