This chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Walse between 1918 and 2011

This chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Walse between 1918 and 2011
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The chart below depicts information about
households
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rented and owned in two countries England and Wales from 1918 to 20011. from an
overall
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, perspective it is evident, that the percentage of rented
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was highest than owned ones. at the beginning ,In ,contrast
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owned ones occupied
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of the period.
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the chart it clearly to can be seen, that the proportion of rented started increasing in 1918 compared with owned per cent which begins at a rate
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20% opposite of rented which was at a rate of 7% at that time,
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the figure for rented
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was dramatically dropped
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the rate of owned went up gradually,
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the surprisingly in 1971 has the similar proportion .Another point is that owned
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went up in 1981,
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both stood at the same level of growth until 2011 when rented had a slight rise .By the end of the period rented a record 30% and owned over 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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