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The graph below show the post-school qualifications held by canadians in the age group 25 to 35 and 45 to 55

The graph below show the post-school qualifications held by canadians in the age group 25 to 35 and 45 to 55
The pie charts below illustrate the Canadians’ higher education field who were born between 1988 and 1998 and between 1968 and 1978.
Overall
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, the majority of the undergraduates from both decades chose to
further
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 their studies in social science and arts. Other than that, there is a significant increase and decrease over the years for most of the majors between the two age groups.
Firstly
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, the administration sector has favoured many current students compared to the older group as it jumps by 4%
as well as
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 Science, Maths, and Computers field which skyrockets by 10%.
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, for education and MBA, there is a slight growth between the two age classes by 2% and 3% respectively.
On the other hand
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, it is obvious that the percentage of engineering students plunge sharply from 19% to 9%
while
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 the number of nursing graduates seems to decline by 4%.
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 but not least, both social science, arts and humanities majors fall by 1% in their total of students for 2 different generations.

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