The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the
proportion
of families who owned or rented
houses
in two different countries England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
Overall
, we can see two contrasting trends; the one which is about owning
houses
witnessed a growing trend and the other a decline. Regarding the households in owned
accommodation
, an upward trend is observable. At the beginning of the period only about 24% owned a house
then
this
proportion
increased moderately by 1939 to 32% and
then
remained the same until 1953. There was a substantial rise until 1971 when householders in rented
houses
and owned ones were at an equal
proportion
of 50%. In following years, it can be easily seen
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significant growth in owning
accommodation
to 60% in 1981.
Also
, 68 and 69 per cent in 1991 and 2001 respectively. Despite the whole trend in owning sector
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growth, a slow decline happened
at the end
of the period. Concerning families in rented
accommodation
in England, about 78% in the year 1918 lived in these types of
accommodation
.
This
amount decreased by 10% until the years 1939 and 1953 when the
proportion
of rented
houses
for families
were
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at the same level. In 1961, a drastic decline happened to about 58%, after the year of the equilibrium between house owners and renters a plummet happened until 2001 to approximately 31%.
On the other hand
, as the owners declined, the renters'
proportion
increased to about 35%
at the end
of the period.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • predominant
  • accommodation
  • trend
  • shift
  • households
  • homeownership
  • economic and social circumstances
  • interwar period
  • post-World War II
  • government policies
  • urbanization
  • public policy
  • economic prosperity
  • tipping point
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