You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter * explain why you would like the job * give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ * say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

Dear Sir or Madam, I write

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letter to express my interest in the position of child care for your children, which I recently saw advertised in a local magazine. As you can see in my attached CV I completed a degree in Pedagogy at Unicamp University, where I was trained to work as an instructor for boys and girls of young age.

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, I have taken a course on child psychology, that I think could be very helpful for educating young people.

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, in my previous experience as a full-time child care, I was responsible for two kids.

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, people usually say that Australia is a lovely place to live and I it would be amazing to spend my free time enjoying the city. I am available for an interview at your earliest convenience. Please, do not hesitate

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me for

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details. Yours Sincerely, Karen Cristine Agg

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Jul 22, 2023

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coherence

Improve the logical structure of the letter to better organize the information.

greeting and closing

The greeting and closing need to be more formal and suitable for a letter to potential employers.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

150 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment

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