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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter * explain why you would like the job * give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ * say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir or Madam, I write
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 letter to express my interest in the position of child care for your children, which I recently saw advertised in a local magazine. As you can see in my attached CV I completed a degree in Pedagogy at Unicamp University, where I was trained to work as an instructor for boys and girls of young age.
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, I have taken a course on child psychology, that I think could be very helpful for educating young people.
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, in my previous experience as a full-time child care, I was responsible for two kids.
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, people usually say that Australia is a lovely place to live and I it would be amazing to spend my free time enjoying the city. I am available for an interview at your earliest convenience. Please, do not hesitate
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 me for
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 details. Yours Sincerely, Karen Cristine Agg
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coherence
Improve the logical structure of the letter to better organize the information.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing need to be more formal and suitable for a letter to potential employers.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
  • Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
  • Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
  • Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
  • Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
  • Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment
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