The company you work for has decided to provide the employees with free healthcare. It has been in contact with a network hospital for a tie-up. However, there is another proposal that the empty conference room should be utilized to set up an in-house medical facility. The company has sent out an opinion survey to know what the employees would prefer.

I personally feel that a
network
hospital is more suitable for our employees. Tough the other choice is almost equally appealing, I would elucidate a couple of reasons to substantiate my argument.
To begin
with, the hospital
network
will provide more facilities, whenever an employee feels unhealthy, he can visit a hospital and carry out check-ups as per doctor suggestions like scanning, x-rays, and diagnosis.
Moreover
, there is a feasibility to visit a hospital from any location within the provider
network
.
Additionally
, employees can
also
choose to treat major injuries or any critical health disorders and can get a discount on the fill bill.
However
, with In-house medical facility employee has to come office every time even for
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small health concern,
also
the organization has to maintain a wide stock of medicines and the amount to be paid to the doctor for each visit though the check-up is free. Considering all the assertions, I am of the opinion that a
network
hospital would be more beneficial for employees and a convincing choice than an in-house medical facility
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