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In many developing countries, there is an increasing movement of workers from rural areas into cities. Why do you think this happen? What problems can this cause.

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Developed countries are increasingly witnessing an internal migration of workers from
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country side
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 to
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 cities.
This
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consequences
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this
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. The
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 of a better
life-quality
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life quality
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 could be the main motive for rural workers to move out of their original town to a big
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metropolis
. The facilities that a modern city offers
for example
, transportation, basic services, housing, shopping, access to medicine and education are some of the biggest factors that
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 people
into
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 it.
Therefore
,improving life standards seems to be the goal of newcomers.
On the other hand
,
as a consequence
 of a
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massive
 and uncontrolled
inmigration
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immigration
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, cities that are already overpopulated are facing high rates of unemployment which represents a significant public
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 the city. Social benefits
such
 as unemployment insurance, rent and health
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 needs to be covered by the local government in order to assist
such
 citizens .
Thus
, an
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excessive
 flow of new arrivals might
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impact
 the labour market and
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increase
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public
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To sum up
,
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individuals
 looking forward to
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his
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 lifestyle by moving to places that have more perks could be the reason why most of the big cities in the world are faces lack of employment.
Hence
,
governements
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governments
 should implement measures to control
such
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exodus
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