Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays,
people
believes
that many Change the verb form
believe
health
problems are exist
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exist
due to
the daily consumption
in
a number of sugary and food drinks processed by the Change preposition
of
manufacture
. Replace the word
manufacturer
Therefore
, it is agreed to put a high rate in
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of
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
non-sugar free
Add a hyphen
non-sugar-free
products
in order to promote people
avoid
sugar Fix the infinitive
to avoid
consumption
. This
essay will elaborate why
I disagree with the aforementioned debate.
Taxing sugary Change preposition
on why
products
unable to guarantee people
in lowering their consumption
on
high-sugar intake food or drinks. Wealthy-family or Change preposition
of
a
gold spoon Correct article usage
apply
people
can still purchase the products
and create a
significant differences Correct article usage
apply
to
insulin-related Change preposition
in
health
problems, which related
to high-sugar intake, Add a missing verb
are related
makes
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making
majority
of them Add an article
the majority
a majority
to
experience Fix the infinitive
apply
the
non-communicable disease. Whenever a person has income to buy, the pattern Correct article usage
apply
to
lower sugar Change preposition
of
consumption
will remain the same. Meanwhile, it should be appropriate to promote a
healthy living Correct article usage
apply
behavior
and keep a good dietary campaign for Change the spelling
behaviour
people
to practice.
Conversely
, rather than dealing with a complex sugary tax rule and system, it would be much impactful
if Correct quantifier usage
more impactful
people
actively maintain sport
activities and transform their Change the noun form
sports
behavior
Change the spelling
behaviour
in
consuming healthy diets. It is scientifically proven that keeping physical exercise on track will increase the Change preposition
into
body
metabolism and fitness level which are positive measures to protect the body from any Change noun form
body's
types
of Fix the agreement mistake
type
health
alteration in the future. Another health
promotion campaign is to consume a high fiber
diet alongside Add a hyphen
high-fiber
with
meats and dairy Change preposition
apply
products
as protein supply.
To conclude
, increasing the rate of sugary food and drinks is not the only key to hinder
Wrong verb form
hindering
people
take a high dose of sugar consumption
. On the other hand
, the author strongly support
Individuals to maintain Change the verb form
supports
a
regular training Correct article usage
apply
while
encourage
them to have a healthy dietary pattern by consuming more fruits and vegetables.Wrong verb form
encouraging
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