The graph shows the rates of participation in three different activities in a UK sports club between 1983 and 2003.

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The line graph illustrates how club members participated in swimming,

team

sports

and

gym

activities

in UK

sports

within a twenty-year period, from 1983 to 2003.

Overall

, the rate of participation in

team

sport and

gym

activities

increased significantly over the time period

while

swimming reduced dramatically within the time frame. The participants who swam were the highest of the three

sports

in 1983 with a rate of 50%. It

then

fell drastically to a little above 10% by 1998 after which it stayed constant in 2003. In 1983, the percentage of participation in

team

sports

and

gym

activities

was nearly 5% and around 40% respectively.

Gym

activities

rose sharply to almost 40% by 1998

then

reduced gradually to 30% in 2003.

Meanwhile

Add a comma

,Meanwhile

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participation in

team

sports

rocketed reaching the rate of swimming at 20% between 1993 and 1998. it

then

experienced a surge to over 25% in 1998 and

subsequently

increased steadily to around 25% by 2003.

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The graph shows the rates of participation in three different activities in a UK sports club between 1983 and 2003.

Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might be this case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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