The table below shows the participayion of people over 15 in selected sports and phusical recreation activities by gender in Australia during the period 2011-12.
The table below gives information on what types of sports activity
man
and women (aged over 15) engaged in in Australia from 2011 to 2012.
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men
Overall
, the total percentage of females
(79,4) who liked to be involved in sports exceeded the total percentage of males
(77,6) with a small difference of 1.8%. Moreover
, the most popular recreations for both genders were walking for exercise (30.4% of females
and almost two times less 16.5% of males
) and fitness gym (19.1% of females
, 15.1% of males
). Swimming and diving were attractive for nearly the same quantity of men and women with a small difference of 0.5% (females
8.0%, males
7.5%).
The average sympathy for people of both sexes was in cycling/BMX (males
dominated by 4,4%) and jogging/running (females
6.4%, males
8.7%). Some types of physical activity were completely avoided by women such
as golf (0%), football (0%) and basketball (0%), while
men didn't pay any attention to netball (0%) and yoga (0%).Submitted by udmitrienko on
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