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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either, to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also see some difficulties discuss of advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country.

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Nowadays, many
people
 are moving abroad to study or work there for a certain period. Those believe that
although
 many advantages are provided, there are
also
 some drawbacks affect following.
This
 essay will explore more about it pros and cons of
people
 living and studying abroad.
Firstly
, by looking at the advantages of moving away. One of the main positives of heading overseas is that broadens horizons. What I mean by
this
 is that you will find many
people
 coming from another country. In
this
 situation, you have the chance to find and learn about different background cultures and traditions
such
 as foods and languages.
Secondly
, moving overseas can lead to a better quality of
life
. Take Indonesian
people
for example
. Thousand of
people
 move to Australia for finding jobs and trying their opportunities in many sectors of
life
.
This
 country not only provides a variety of job for expert workers but
also
 have the same climate as Indonesia especially, in Perth and Darwin. By living overseas
people
 can gain qualifications and
language
 skills that can use after returning to their home country and may improve promotion prospects. Turning to the other side of the argument
it is clear that
 culture shock is a major problem. many
people
 who take a year out find it hard to cope with the
language
 barrier, food and general cultural differences.
This
 often leads the homesickness and sometimes
people
 feel isolated. Another issue is that it can be difficult to start a new
life
 from scratch.
in other words
, when you move abroad you have to make new friends and find your place in the community.
This
 process takes time and will be especially challenging if there is
also
 a
language
 barrier to deal with. All things considered, starting from difficult conditions
such
 as
language
 barrier and culture shocks
as well as
 the benefits aspect (broadening the horizon and gaining a better quality of
life
 are two aspects that
people
 have to choose. I personally believe that the benefits effect of living and studying abroad outweigh any negatives.
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