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The bar chart below shows the average duration of housework women did (unemployed, part-time employed and full-time) when compared to men who had full-time work in the UK between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the average duration of housework women did (unemployed, part-time employed and full-time) when compared to men who had full-time work in the UK between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented bar chart illustrates information about the average duration of
housework
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 unemployment, part-
time
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 and full-
time
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employment
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women
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 did when compared to
men
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 with full-
time
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 in the UK from 1985 to 2005. It is measured in
hours
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
women
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 spent more
time
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 on household work than
men
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.
Firstly
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, evidently unemployed
women
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 spend more
time
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 on
housework
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 compared to everyone else, in 1985 they spent 7
hours
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 on household work.
Women
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 with part-
time
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employment
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 spent five and a half
hours
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 on
housework
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.
Women
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 with full-
time
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employment
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 spent 2
hours
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,
whereas
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men
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 spent only 1 hour. Over the next ten years, the number of
hours
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 spent on
housework
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 was reduced by half an hour for all except for
men
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, their
time
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 remains unchanged,
however
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 during the next 10 years in 2005, unemployed
women
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’s
housework
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 returned to the same
time
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, growing to 30 minutes. Full-
time
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 and part-
time
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employment
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women
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's
housework
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time
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 increased by an hour, reaching an all-
time
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 peak, and full-
time
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employment
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men
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's
time
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 rose by 30 minutes,
also
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 reaching the apex.
Finally
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, for 20 years, the
time
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 spent at house-working for everyone has increased, except for unemployed
women
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, remaining stable

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words housework, employment, women, men, hours, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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