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You have moved to another city but your bank has your old address and continues to send all communication there. Write a letter to your bank branch. In the letter mention: Where have you moved to? What problem are you facing regarding the Banks communication? What you want them to do regarding old communication already sent to the wrong address?

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Dear Sir, My name is Baljinder Singh and I am writing to inquire about
to change
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 my mailing
address
 because I have
move
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one
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 place to another place. Recently, I moved to Ludhiana for some personal
reason
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 but, I do not update my new communication
address
 in
bank
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the bank
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 and some other places
that
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is
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 house no.23 Red Avenue, gate no.4, Ludhiana, Punjab.
Few
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 months ago, I
had
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applied
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 my new credit
card
 through
the
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net banking.
However
,
this
 credit
card
 does not receive
to
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 me because you sent
to
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apply
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this
card
on
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 my old
address
. It is my humble request to re-sent my
card
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 my new mailing
address
 as soon as possible. Please feel free to contact me via email. [email protected], if you need any other information. Thank you so much for
you
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 time and consideration. Yours faithfully, Baljinder Singh
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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