The table below shows the percentage of working men and women in different areas of employment in one country in 1986, 1996 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the percentage of working men and women in different areas of employment in one country in 1986, 1996 and 2006.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the percentage of
the
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apply
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Men
and
Women
in different
area
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areas
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of employment that has different in 1986, 1996 and 2006.
Overall
,
whatever
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whether
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men
or
women
in
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are in
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different
Add an article
a different
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area of employment
that
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apply
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the employee trends was similar in these
years
. The sheet
display
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displays
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the four types of
the
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apply
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occupation for
men
and
women
. Catering, it has 26
percent
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per cent
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women
work
in
this
job
in 1986, 1996 and 2006. But for
men
, it was respective 16, 22 and 22
percent
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per cent
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people
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of people
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work
in
this
job
in these
years
. Banking, the
work
people
has
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have
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increased in 1986, 1996 and 2006. The
men
employees in these
years
was
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were
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respective
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respectively
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11%, 20% and 21. And the
women
has
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have
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12%, 16% and 19% respectively.
Manufacturing
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The manufacturing
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industry has many
people
work
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working
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in
this
job
in 1986
that
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apply
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has 32%
men
and 18%
women
in
this
job
. But in 1996 and 2006, the number of
people
was reduced
whatever
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whether
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men
or
women
. The
men
has 21% and 17%
respective
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respectively
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in 1996 and 2006, and the
women
has 12% and 6% respectively. The
last
occupation in the sheet was education, the
men
has 13%, 14% and 15% respectively in 1986, 1996 and 2006, and the
women
has 33%, 35% and 38% respectively in three different
years
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, years, work, job, people with synonyms.
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