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Writing Samples
Band 4

You recently stayed at a hotel and were dissatisfied with the service you received. Write a letter to the hotel manager, explaining the situation and expressing your dissatisfaction. In your letter, you should: • Describe the problem and the details of your stay. • Explain how it affected your experience. • Suggest possible solutions or actions that you would like the manager to take.

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Dear Manager, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing to express my dissatisfaction about the
the
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service I received at your
hotel
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, where I stayed from 5th to 7th June during my visit to the city. The problems started just after I checked in. I found out that there was no running water in the sink. I immediately informed the
hotel
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 management about the issue. They consoled me by saying that the maintenance worker
is
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one
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 his way and asked me to use water from the bucket they provided for the time being. I thought
it’s
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 fine as long as it
will
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 be fixed in
a
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 hour or two.
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However
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 no one showed up to fix my problems. I
report
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 repeatedly and got the same answer. That was so frustrating
to
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 say the least.
Due to
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lack
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 of water, my bathroom was stinking to the point that I couldn’t use it anymore. I didn’t get to bath during my entire stay. I had to use
public
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a public
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 bathroom near the
hotel
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. My experience of the whole trip turned out to be bitter
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this
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. I wasn’t expecting
such
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thing
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 from a
hotel
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 of your reputation. I would like to make
few
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a few
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 suggestions. First of all, you could hire a
full time
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 maintenance worker so that they are available all day.
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, you should make sure that all the amenities are working before renting out a room. I hope you look into the issue. Thank you for your time. Sincerely, John Doe

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Task Achievement
Expand on certain details to improve the completeness of your response and provide richer context.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and is well-developed to enhance the overall coherence and flow.
Writing Tone
Your letter has a polite and formal tone, which is appropriate for communicating with a hotel manager.
Task Achievement
You clearly described the problems you encountered during your stay, making it easy to understand your dissatisfaction.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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