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With the recent improvement to the internet, people can leave views or opinions on certain goods or services that they have purchased. Is it a good or bad thing. Discuss both views.

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There is no doubt that the invention of
internet
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 has
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 to
the
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changes
the
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 ways how
customers
 gather information about the things and
service
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services
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 they intend to purchase. I would argue that
this
 is a negative trend, and
this
 essay will support my
opinion
 via a discussion of
the
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both sides.
To begin
 with the positives, one of the most beneficial
aspect
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 for
business
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businesses
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 which
recieve
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receive
 reviews from their
customers
 is that they are allowed to catch the real voice
from
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 their users. 
This
 means that they may become more able to adapt
the
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 needs of their users than they used to be before they
incooporate
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incorporate
incorporated
the
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their
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opinion
 from them. As for the
customers
,
this
 trend to offer them
platform
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a platform
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 where they can speak out
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and speak
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speak out
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their feeling towards
products
 and service
which
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in which
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 they spend their money
also
 enable them to have insight about goods and service before they decide to buy them. 
For instance
, a person is able to know about the quality of a clothing's textile by reading a review and
decide
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 if they buy from it without physically
touch
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 it.
Nevertheless
,
this
 trend to publish customer's
opinion
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opinions
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 does present some problems. In terms of companies, they can get not only good comments but
also
critisism
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criticism
.
While
advertisemsnt
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advertisement
advertisements
 which companies make only by themselves can tell only aspects
on
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 their
products
, reviews from various
customers
 tend to contain
complains
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, which would hinder potential
customers
 to buy something from the company. With respect to individuals, what they need to keep in their mind is that what they see from their
reputaion
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reputation
 is not always true. As it is not possible for them to be assured if the writer is an
ordinally
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 customer or a person who has a connection with the enterprise,
tremendous
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 amount of information online can be
distruptive
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disruptive
 for them to make a decision
which
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about which
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 product to buy. In conclusion,
although
 the benefits
customers
'
review
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reviews
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 can bring about in markets are companies' capability to know the genuine
opinion
 about their
products
 and
customers
'
possiblility
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possibility
 to be reflected their views by the makers, there is a real danger for both sides of them to misinforming about
products
 and services if people rely on
such
 reviews at all times.
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