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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart above analyzes the changes in
families
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' spending habits in 1968 compared to 2018, focusing on the average spending choices of
families
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, based on their weekly
income
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. As the data
provide
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, the major difference in money allocation from 1968 to 2018 resides in
food
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 and leisure expenses: even though
food
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 is still one of the most spent on commodities,
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 in 1968 a family dedicated 35% of its
income
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 to
food
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 expenses, in 2018 the value drops almost by half, to 18%. As a matter of fact, in 2018
families
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' first investment is in leisure, to which it is dedicated 22% of the
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income
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, a complete counter tendency from 1968, as
families
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 only spent 9% of their
income
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 on
such
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 activities back
then
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. Staying on the results from the 2018 survey, housing and
food
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 are closely behind extracurricular activities, scoring a 19% and 17%. Regarding the other categories, not much has changed, except for spending habits on clothing and footwear, which dropped by half in 2018. Even the costs of personal goods and fuel and power seem to have slightly decreased in 2018.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words families, income, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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