The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparison where relevant.
The chart describes the data about
families
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families'
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weekly
expenditure
prospects in 1968 and in 2018 The most significant
spent
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spending
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rate is on food with a 35% ratio in the year 1968 Housing and clothing come next with the same prospect of 10% of the weekly income.
Expenditure
on leisure, transport personal
goods
and household
goods
are almost
same
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the same
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percentage, the former one is slightly more
Lastly
, spent rates on fuel and the others are recorded the least with a U in the year of
que
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queue
Turning to 2018,
food
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the food
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expenditure
of families had dropped dramatically to a percentage between 15 to 20.
On the other
hand
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housing
spent
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spending
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had
rised
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risen
raised
rise
significantly
with
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by
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an almost 20% slightly more than feed expenditures. The most crucial rise was recorded
on
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in
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lesure
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leisure
spent
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spending
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rates. It
had
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soared
abut
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about
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10 in 50 years Transportation
expeditures
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expenditures
comes after and followed by Household
goods
and the one categories
respetively
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respectively
Last
three
had
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remained the least just as in 1968 which
is
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are
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fuel and power clothing and
footware
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footwear
and personal
goods
.
Overall
, weekly
expenditure
averages of families had dramatically changed over 50 years Some
spent
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spending
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rates had remained the same
whereas
some of the alterations are quite 
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noticeable
noticable
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noticeable
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, goods with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rised" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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