The charts below show ưhat UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008

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The charts display UK graduate and postgraduate students about

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work. The chart describes the work did after leaving college in 2008. There are two tables.

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graduates admitted in part-time work are 17735, in a

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voluntary is 3500, in

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research are 29665 and in unemployment are 15235.

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, in postgraduate admission working part-time is 2535, in voluntary is 345, in

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research are 2725 and in ,unemployment there are 1625.

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, more number are in

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study and fewer are in voluntary.

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, around haft people were unemployed. More people are doing part-time jobs. Fewer people are doing

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. More children are doing

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study. A part-time job is done more by postgraduate compared to graduate children. The highest number of women have chosen

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works. In conclusion, the data is about 2008. The above data describes what students do after doing their graduate and postgraduate. The data is about the UK.

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The charts below show ưhat UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008

Work is being done on the street where you live. The noise is disturbing you. Write a letter of complaint to your local council. In your letter: introduce yourself explain what the problem is suggest solutions to the problem

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Some people say that protecting the environment is the governments’ responsibility. others believe that every individual should take responsibility for it. Discuss Both views and give your opinion.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.