The charts below show ưhat UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008
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graduates admitted in part-time work are 17735, in aChange the punctuation
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research are 29665 and in unemployment are 15235. Secondly
, in postgraduate admission working part-time is 2535, in voluntary is 345, in further
research are 2725 and in ,unemployment there are 1625. Thirdly
, more number are in further
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, around haft people were unemployed. More people are doing part-time jobs. Fewer people are doing voluntarily
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study. A part-time job is done more by postgraduate compared to graduate children. The highest number of women have chosen Futher
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In conclusion, the data is about 2008. The above data describes what students do after doing their graduate and postgraduate. The data is about the UK.Correct your spelling
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