The top priority of the businesses is making money, and they do not need to have social resposibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It's agreed that the top priority of the businesses is generating profit, and they don'
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need to have social
reposibilities
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responsibilities
, but some people
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argue
agree
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,I will introduce my idea about two problems in
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essay. On the one hand, many businesses just make
money
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and they don'
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have to be responsible for society. Indeed, by producing low-quality
goods
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and advertising
it
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them
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like good products, they can earn more
money
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instead
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of being
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criticised
by many consumers ,
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can provide enough
money
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for them to pay for their staff and materials.
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, they don'
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have to support
money
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for many volunteering campaigns and they can use it for producing many new
goods
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or give many
peolpe
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people
more opportunities to have a job.
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, they should be responsible for society. If they don'
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do that and produce low-quality
goods
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, many customers won'
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believe them and don'
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pay anything
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them.
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, they can get
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when selling their new products.
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, doing many campaigns serving for
community
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the community
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can give people
good
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a good
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impression so there will be more consumers that are loyal to buy
goods
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from them. In conclusion, I believe that many companies should not only generate profit but
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take part in many
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services like helping poor children living in the mountain. By doing
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that, they can earn more
money
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as well as
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they can have strong loyalty from many people.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial stability
  • economic activity
  • public image
  • customer loyalty
  • ethical obligation
  • environmental degradation
  • regulatory compliance
  • legal penalties
  • investor trust
  • consumer base
  • innovation
  • sustainable practices
  • profitability
  • exploit
  • retain employees
  • job creation
  • unemployment rates
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