The top priorty of businesses is making money, and they do not need to have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is believed that making
money
is the most important thing in businesses and it is unneccessary
to be responsible to society. Correct your spelling
unnecessary
This
writer disagree
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disagrees
this
opinion and will explain the reason why.
First of all, it cannot be objected that making Change preposition
with this
money
is essential to each person. For example
, without money
, people will not be able to afford the
medicine, food and clothes. Correct article usage
apply
Additionally
, families owning lots of property are able to make condition
for their children to have better education and ensure their future life, both in skills and morality.
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conditions
However
, to only prioritze
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prioritise
money
can make a person more greedy and emotionless with other people, which would seperate
them from the community. Correct your spelling
separate
This
type of humans
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human
usually
ready to harm anyone just to achieve their goals. Add a missing verb
is usually
In
the opposite, a businessman who has social responsibilities is always loved and admired. Change preposition
On
For example
, a rich who donates voluntarily would be known and remembered more than one does
not. Correct pronoun usage
who does
Moreover
, their colleagues would be happy to help and support
, which will make their career much easier and be able to go Correct pronoun usage
themsupport
further
.
To summarize, as well as
earning a lot of money
, it is neccessary
to have social responsibilities in business. People and companies should care more about helping the poor and the Correct your spelling
necessary
disable
.Change the form of the verb
disabled
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