The diagram details the process of making smoked fish. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram details the process of making smoked fish.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given illustration details the steps by which
fish
is processed from the sea to the shops.
Overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that the processing of
fish
can be divided into 3 main stages beginning with catching and transportation, followed by storage and processing, and
further
storage and transportation to
fish
shops for retail. The process commences when
fish
are caught in nets and
then
transported by boat to a port. From
this
point, they are frozen and after
that
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they undergo a thawing process in freshwater. The next stage is to slice open the
fish
and put them in a saltwater solution that
also
contains some amount of yellow colouring.
Following
this
, the actual smoking takes place. After smoking, the
fish
are packaged in boxes and frozen at zero degrees centigrade in larger containers. They are
finally
grouped into cold storage bins and distributed by truck to shops to sell to consumers
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