The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the graph above that illustrates ways in average families spend money weekly, in 1968 food had the most share of spending with 35%, unlike Fuel and power which had the least share with only 6% and gets the
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place in the chart in 1968. But in 2018 both of the item's percentages fall to 17% and 4%.
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, in 2018 Food gave its place to Leisure by 22%, which was 9% in 1968. The second spot though goes to Housing which improved from 10% in 1968 to 19% in 2018.
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Transport had a huge improvement and from 8% got to 14%, which is pretty good!
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, In spite of everything changing from 1968 to 2018, Household goods stayed the same and did not change at all and have had only 8% of the market! Interestingly Personal goods share decreased from 8% in 1968 to 4% in 2018 ,
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Clothing and footwear
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had a drop from 10% to %5 weekly. In ,short you can say, in 1968 Food was the most important item for people to put money on and Fuel was the least-liked on the list, but as time passed, Leisure had become the favourite one which people were willingly spending their money on and Fuel and power that again was stuck in the same spot!
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