The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
The chart illustrates the first ten countries which produce and consumed electricity in the year 2014.
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, it can be seen that China and the United States were the major producers and consumers among others, Linking Words
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, the Republic of Korea had the Linking Words
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position.
Regarding the first two countries, the difference between the production of electricity and its consumption was partial in China with 5,398 and 5,322 Linking Words
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respectively. The United States produced 4,099 Use synonyms
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which 3,866 of Use synonyms
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amount is utilized by consumers.
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the production and consumption of China and the United States were more than 3 thousand, the gap between them and others was abundant because others’ manufacturing and usage were about one thousand or less. Russia, Japan, and India were at the Linking Words
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fourth, and fifth positions respectively by a few differences in their amount of production and use. Linking Words
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, the gap between Canada, France, Brazil, and Germany was almost less than 50 Linking Words
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in their inputs and outputs of electricity. Use synonyms
Finally
, Korea produced approximately 485 Linking Words
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and used 449 Use synonyms
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of it in that year.Use synonyms
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