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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
two
 maps illustrate the location of roads and accessibility to a hospital during the period
of
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 2007 and 2010.
Overall
, the
road
 infrastructure has developed over the given period,
two
 roundabouts have been added and a
car
park
 was broadened and divided
in
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 sections. In the year 2007, the Hospital
Road
 led to the main hospital, and there were six bus stops along the
road
. During the same year, the was a
car
park
 used by staff and
public
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the public
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.
On the contrary
, in 2010, in the north and the south parts of Hospital
Road
two
 roundabouts were added. In the meantime, there was a bus station in the west and a
car
park
 for staff
in
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 the east
from
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of
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 Hospital
Road
. It can be
also
 noted that
car
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the car
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park
 near the
road
 was modernised by separating
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it in
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in
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two
 different locations for staff and public usage. The public
car
park
 was located to the east of the city hospital.
According to
 the maps, during the given period, the Ring
Road
 around the hospital hadn’t experienced significant changes.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, road, car, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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