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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
two
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 maps illustrate the location of roads and accessibility to a hospital during the period
of
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 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, the
road
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 infrastructure has developed over the given period,
two
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 roundabouts have been added and a
car
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park
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 was broadened and divided
in
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 sections. In the year 2007, the Hospital
Road
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 led to the main hospital, and there were six bus stops along the
road
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. During the same year, the was a
car
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park
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 used by staff and
public
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the public
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.
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, in 2010, in the north and the south parts of Hospital
Road
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two
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 roundabouts were added. In the meantime, there was a bus station in the west and a
car
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park
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 for staff
in
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 the east
from
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 Hospital
Road
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. It can be
also
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 noted that
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car
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the car
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park
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 near the
road
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 was modernised by separating
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it in
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in
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two
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 different locations for staff and public usage. The public
car
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park
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 was located to the east of the city hospital.
According to
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 the maps, during the given period, the Ring
Road
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 around the hospital hadn’t experienced significant changes.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, road, car, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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