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The chart shows the percentage of people in one country, by age group, who visited one or more museums in 2006, 2011 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of people in one country, by age group, who visited one or more museums in 2006, 2011 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the shift in the proportion of
people
 who visit museums by different
age
 groups from 2006 to 2016.
Overall
, museums increase their popularity in the three
age
 groups of
people
 from 25 to 54.
However
, the number of visitors from 55 to 64 declined dramatically.
According to
 the chart, it is interesting to note that the proportion of middle
age
 who go to art galleries tends to grow from 2006 to 2016.
For example
,
while
 27% of guests between 25 and 34 visited there in 2006, the percentages gradually rise from 2011 and 2016 with 30% and 33% respectively.
Furthermore
, far more
people
 between 35 and 44 visited museums with 37% in 2016 than 20% in 2006.
Although
 the graph for the 45-54
age
 group skyrocketed to reach 30% in 2011, it remained stable in 2016. There is a slight upward trend among visitors of 15-24
age
 in 2011, after which they returned to the same level at 25% as in 2006.
On the other hand
, the bar indicates that visiting galleries became less attractive to those between 55 and 64 in 2016.
For instance
, as much as 40% of the
people
 visited there in 2006
whereas
 the graph dropped significantly by 10% in 2016. The proportions of seniors over 65 continued to stay relatively lower than other groups and they only fluctuated between 18 and 22 during the examined period.
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