The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given diagram illustrates that in the process of instant

noodles

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, there are 8 stages of

this

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production.

Overall

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, it is observed that

the first step is

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collecting the flour from storage silos by a truck, and the procedure finishes with packaging the prepared

noodles

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into beautiful wrappers.

Initially

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, the method

commence

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commences

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with collecting the flour and

send

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sending

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it for mixing the water and oil

buy

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a mixer.

Moreover

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, the machine contains all the ingredients and

prepare

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prepares

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a dough sheet with the help of rollers. In the next stage, dough sheets

converted

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are converted

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into dough strips to make noodle discs and fried in a deep heat cooking oil.

Furthermore

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, store

noodles

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discs for drying.

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this

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, the seventh step is adding vegetables, spices, and

noodles

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into the cups.

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, the procedure is ready for labelling and sealing before being delivered to consumers

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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4 paragraphs

143 words

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