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The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the percentage of retail sales made online of four diverse products in Canada in 2005 and 2010. looking for an
overall
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 perspective, some the of the supplies increased and others decreased, Electronic and appliances were one of the largest orders in the given period. The two biggest sections in 2005 were electronics and home furnishings, with 35%, and 25% respectively .
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 , both of them dropped to 30% and 15%
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 , the remaining two competitors, food and Video games with 22% and 18% food & beverage saw a notable increase and next achieve the first-highest sector by 2010. Despite the video games rising to 23% in the year 2010

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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