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Bar chart - the components of GDP in the UK, from 1992 to 2000 Gross domestic product from IT and service inductry of the UK, (as a % of GDP)

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The bar chart shows the components of GDP from the years 1992 and 2000 in the UK. The IT
industry
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 peaked at the highest
amount
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 in 2000 and the lowest
amount
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 in 1992,
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 the service
industry
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 the highest
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 was achieved in 2000 as well and the lowest in 1992. First of all, the IT
industry
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 witnessed a gradual improvement which was the
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 achieved in 1992 almost 6% ,
then
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 start increasing to reach 8 %,
then
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 the
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 again decreased to arrive less than 8 %, again testifying a good achievement to get the 12 % in 1998,
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 in 2000 was the best achievement witnessed for the IT
industry
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 which peaked above 14% and it was the highest
number
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 for IT which gradually year by year achieved.
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, the service
industry
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 witnessed a slight fluctuation with little improvement through the years, since the lowest
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 achieved was in 1992 at 4% only, and start with slight improvement which was achieved in 1994 with almost 6 %, and with the same
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 in 1996 with little improve in 1998 to reach approximately 8% and the arrived to the highest
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 in 2000 with accurate 8 %.

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