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the top priority of businesses is makeing money, and they do not need to have a social responbilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#priority #businesses #money #responbilities
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It is evident that
the
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apply
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most high-end company is making a large revenue without
undertake
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undertaking
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 any social duties. I partly agree with
this
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 statement since it can be affected
to
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our life society. In the first place, the most necessary issue in our life is one group of
the
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apply
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entrepreneur
nearly
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who nearly
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 forget their public
responbilities
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responsibilities
. Their enterprise
is depend
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depends
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 on people's lives and how the society
run
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is run
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. Presently, They make money based on their
greedy
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. They desolate the environment to make
the
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 profit. No one can know how they earn plenty of
benefit
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benefits
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. Their factory emissions a large
amount
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 of harmful gases
such
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 as carbon dioxide which is affected directly to our life and
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damaged
damage
dammaged
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damage
 to
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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,
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create
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creating
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greenhouse
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a greenhouse
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 effect
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