The charts below show the proportion of expenditure by students, on average, at one university, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportion of expenditure by students, on average, at one university, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show the proportion of expenditure by students, on average, at one university, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph demonstrates the amount earned by graduates of different
age
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groups in 2002. The first key feature shows that first-degree graduates had the lowest weekly
earnings
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for most of the period. They show a noticeable fall in
earnings
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in the
age
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group
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46–50,
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a decline can
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be seen in the others category after the
age
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group
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36–40. Beginning with about $350 at the
age
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of 21–25,
earnings
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rose steadily to around $700 by the
age
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group
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36–40.
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,
earnings
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fell to around $670 in the 46–50
group
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, before rising slightly again to about $690 by 56–60,
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they remained the lowest
overall
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.
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, higher-degree graduates and those with other qualifications showed stronger growth. Higher-degree
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started at around $400 at 21–25, decreased slightly in middle
age
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, and finished as the highest in the 56–60
group
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. Meanwhile, the
others
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group
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increased from about $410 to a peak of around $810 at 36–40, before declining gradually toward the end of the period.
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,
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generally increased with
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until the late thirties, after which they either
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or declined slightly.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, earnings, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proportion of expenditure
  • Revenue
  • Categories
  • Significant changes
  • Spending habits
  • Relatively stable
  • Inflation
  • Lifestyle
  • Investments
  • Academic materials
  • Entertainment
  • Accommodation
  • Utilities
  • Food
  • Transportation
  • Miscellaneous expenses
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