nowadays, more people are migrating to other countries than ever before. In order to become integrated into society in therir adopted countries, immigrants should abandon their old ways and adapt to local customs and codes of behaviour

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Moving into a foreign nation has significantly increased as compared to the past, Some people believe that

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to be a part of these countries, they should not follow their traditional

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and rituals.

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, I believe people should respect the local culture, where they choose to live, but

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, follow their own rituals and

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with, people are deciding to move to another state for various reasons, one of the major reasons is improving their lifestyle. It is evident that

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many second-world citizens dream to settle in Western countries, to avail luxuries.

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, when they arrive in their dream country, they feel uncomfortable in the beginning,

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the language barrier. Though

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they feel disconnected from

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society, and for that reason mix up with new culture, even if they are not aware of their practices, follow blindly and ignore their own traditional

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, it is not necessary to forget your own rituals

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their importance.

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, they may provide information about their festivals, inviting locals when they are celebrating,

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they understand the value of practices, which will make our community diverse. To illustrate, Isckon is a religious organisation, that built many temples across most of the western countries. They not only invite local residents to function but

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, spread the message of Lord Krishna, how we should live our life. In conclusion, I believe governments, who invite foreign citizens to in their country provide support in various ways

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free coaching for local language, local

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and many more, so that they easily

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with the local population.

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migrants should put efforts to understand each other cultures and respect them.

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nowadays, more people are migrating to other countries than ever before. In order to become integrated into society in therir adopted countries, immigrants should abandon their old ways and adapt to local customs and codes of behaviour

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Beside a lot of advantages, some people believe that the Internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Government Intervention in the Economy: Some people believe that governments should regulate the economy, while others argue that the economy should be allowed to regulate itself. Discuss both views and give your opinion in 250 words.

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do you think that the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In the modern world, many employees lack soft skill such as communication and working in the teams. What are the main causes of this problem? What are the effects of the lack of such skills ?