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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows the annual income of languages-related jobs in US dollars in five cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows the annual income of languages-related jobs in US dollars in five cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart depicts the yearly
income
 shown in US Dollars for
language
-related jobs
such
 as
Interpreter
,
Translator
 and
Language
Teacher
 occurred in Mexico, Dubai, Paris, Munich and
Toronto
.
Overall
,
Toronto
 became the city with the highest-paid
Interpreter
 and
Language
Teacher
while
in contrast
, Mexico was the lowest
income
 place for all roles.
To begin
 with,
Interpreter
 in
Toronto
 had an annual
income
 of about
USD
 80.000 which made them the highest rate in all roles and cities.
Then
,
Translator
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Translators
show examples
 and
Language
Teacher
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Teachers
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 in
Toronto
 were getting the same value approximately above
USD
 60.000.
Next,
Interpreter
 in Munich would get not less than
USD
 70.000 whilst
Translator
 generates
income
 equally with
Toronto
 and
Language
Teacher
 got yearly paid at exactly
USD
 60.000.
Furthermore
,
Interpreter
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Interpreters
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 in Paris earn the same amount as
Translator
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Translators
show examples
 by more than
USD
 60.000,
whereas
Language
Teacher
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Teachers
show examples
 are far lower by approximately more than
USD
 40.000.
Subsequently
,
Interpreter
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Interpreters
show examples
 and
Language
Teacher
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Teachers
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 in Dubai had similar annual rates of
USD
 60.000
while
Translator
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Translators
show examples
 got slightly lower by
USD
 50.000 per year.
Lastly
, Mexico was the lowest
income
 for every role compared to all cities where
Interpreter
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Interpreters
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,
Translator
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Translators
show examples
 and English
Teacher
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Teachers
show examples
 earn an annual
income
 below
USD
 20.000.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, interpreter, translator, language, teacher, toronto, usd with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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