the graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005

the graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005
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the spending on food in four countries from 1995 to 2005.
Over all
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, all the countries
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increased in
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time
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. Germany and France
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higher than
two
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countries and
then
Italy and Austria
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lowest
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. With regards to spending on food in Germany started at 80% and
then
increased to 90% in 1999.
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, it
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decreased to 85% but it reached a peak
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95% in 2005.
Likewise
, France had 55% in the first year and climb up to 70% in 2001. It remain stable between 2001 and 2005 and increased to 75% in the
last
year.
In contrast
, Italy stood at 50% in 1995 and
then
increased to 55% in 1997. In 1999, it just had 50% but it rose to 62% in 2005. The
last
country is Austria accounted for 30%in 1995 and increased to 40% in 1999. It remain unchanged from 1999 to 2001 and
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rose
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61% in 2005.
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  • expenditure
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • trough
  • correlation
  • digital reading platforms
  • socio-economic factors
  • initiatives
  • cultural influence
  • statistical data
  • purchasing habits
  • book industry
  • consumer spending
  • educational resources
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