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The grap shows the amount of money spent on book in Germany, France, Italy and Austia between 1995 and 2005

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The line graph demonstrates the expenditure on
book
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books
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of
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in
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 Germany, France, Italy and Austria from 1995 to 2005.
Overal
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, it can
seen
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be seen
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 that the amount
money
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of money
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 which
Germanies
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the Germanies
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 spent on books was the highest
while
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 the lowest was the budget of
Autria
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Austria
. In the starting
period
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, the spending on
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the book
a book
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book
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books
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of
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in
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 Germany was the highest at 80
milions
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million
millions
 $. It was the highest amount of money between 1996 and 2005. The number
then
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 experienced a significant rise to 90
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millions
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million
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 $, it reached a low of about 70
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millions
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million
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 $. Before
eding
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ending
editing
 the
period
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 at approximately 100
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millions
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million
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 $.
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, the budget for
book
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the book
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of
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apply
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Autria
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Austria
 was
lowest
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the lowest
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 during the
period
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 which had a rapid increase in after years and ended
over
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 60 million $. The number for France started at 55
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millions
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million
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 $, followed by a slight increase during the
period
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 and ended at over 70
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millions
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million
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 $.
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 the figure for Italy had average spending which has slight changes and had the lowest ending amount
about
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 60
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