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the graph show the amount of money spent on book in Germany , France , Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

the graph show the amount of money spent on book in Germany , France , Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
The line graph describes the cost had been paid
on
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 books in four different
country
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 from 1995 to 2005.
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, we can see Germany was the highest
in
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four
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 countries.
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 Austria was the lowest but in the
last
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 period it was higher than Italy. The amount of money spent on books was
increase
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 sharply in four countries. Looking at the figure in
further
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 detail , we can see Germany started at 80 million $,after which it experienced
a
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growth to 90 million $ in 1999. And
next
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 4 years I
was fell
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 slowly to roughly 85
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millions
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 $, before ending the period at 95
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millions
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 $. The amount of France started at roughly 55
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millions
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 $ , after which it
rocket
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 to roughly 75
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millions
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million
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 $ in
ending
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 period. Turning to the remaining, Italy started at 50 million $ and next 4 years It
wasn’t change
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wasn’t changed
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. In 2005 it jumped quickly to around 60 to 70
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millions
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 $, after which it experienced a rise to 40
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millions
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 $ in 1999. Next 2 years it
wasn’t change
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. In 2005 it went quickly to 70
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millions
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 $ was higher than Italy.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 3 times.
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