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The grap shows the amount of money spent on book in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

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The given
line
 graph
show
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shows
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 the amount of money spent on a book in
Germany
, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
Overall
 it can be seen
Germany
 is the highest
percentage
 of money spent on
book
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books
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at
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for
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 the first
time
 and Austria is the lowest
percentage
. Looking at
firgues
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figures
,
Germany
 appeared
at
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in
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 1995 with the highest money : 80
million
dollars
. The
line
 went up to 90
million
dollars
 between 1995 and 1999.
At the
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The
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 next
time
, in 2003, it went back to
near
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nearly
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 80
milion
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million
dollars
, it take a long
time
to
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for to
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Germany
 can
went
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go
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 up and
peaked
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peak
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 at 95
million
dollars
 to be the country
had
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that had
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 the highest
percentage
at
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apply
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last
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the last
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time
. France is the next highest
line
 after
Germany
, appeared
at
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in
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 1995 with 55
million
dollars
 but it went up to nearly 80
million
dollar
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dollars
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 between 1995 and 2005. Next is Italy, appeared same
time
with
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as
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Germany
 and
france
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France
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at
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for
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 the first
time
, the
line
 started with 50
million
 cabbage, it fluctuated between 1995 and 1999, but at
this
time
, it had a big
changed
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change
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, the
line
 started
went
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going
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 up to the highest, 50
million
dollars
, but it not enough to compare with another
line
, it was the lowest
line
 of all. Austria is the lowest
percentage
in
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for
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 the first
time
 but it went up to
the
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a
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percentage
 which is higher than Italy, it didn’t fall all of the
time
 between 1995 and 2005.
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