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The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany,France,Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany,France,Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
The line graph describes the cost had been paid on books in four different countries from 1995 to 2005.
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, we can see Germany was the highest of the four countries.
Whereas
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 Austria was the lowest but in the
last
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 period it was higher than Italy. The amount of money spent on books increased sharply in four countries. Looking at the figure in
further
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 detail, we can see Germany started at 80
million
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$, after which it experienced growth to 90
million
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$ in 1999. And
the
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 next 4 years I fell slowly to roughly 85
million
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$, before ending the period at 95
million
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$. The amount of France started at roughly 55
million
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$, after which it rocketed to roughly 75
million
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$ in the ending period. Turning to the remaining, Italy started at 50
million
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$ and next 4 years It hasn’t changed. In 2005 it jumped quickly to around 60 to 70
million
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$, after which it experienced a rise to 40
million
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$ in 1999. Next 2 years it hasn’t changed. In 2005 it went quickly to 70
million
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$ was higher than in Italy.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • trough
  • correlation
  • digital reading platforms
  • socio-economic factors
  • initiatives
  • cultural influence
  • statistical data
  • purchasing habits
  • book industry
  • consumer spending
  • educational resources
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