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The top priority of businesses is making money, and thay do not need to have social responsibilities. To what extent you agree or disagree

#priority #businesses #money #thay #responsibilities
The main reason
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company
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the company
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 is to make
the
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a
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 profit. So
thay
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they
 do not not need to have
personality
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a personality
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.
while
i
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 accept that
this
 perception is
some what
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somewhat
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 suitable,
i
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I
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bekieave
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believe
 that
my self
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I
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dissagree
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disagree
 with
this
 idea and will give
reason
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a reason
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 why.
firstly
 if
one
 or more
company
 do not have social responsibilities and continue to working and focus on making
alot
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a lot
 of money
day
 and
day
 .there are a great deal of
problem
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problems
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 that people have to face
with
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.
on
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one
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the one
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 hand if the
company
 continue to work with down personality the
resault
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result
 of that harmful type of working is the
polution
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pollution
 of natural example air
pollutin
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pollution
 or water pollution,... .
however
, all of us using and living with that
poluted
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polluted
 air and water
day
 and
day
 so it
have
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alot
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a lot
 of negative impact on our health. cause of
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a lot
alot
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a lot
 of diseases
secondly
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 if
one
 or more
company
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companies
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 continue to
mining
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 the natural resources in the incontinence way.
one
day
 that resources
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come
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be come
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become
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 to run out
of
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when we use too much and will become

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