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The bar chart provides information about how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart provides information about how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart shows the average weekly spending of families in one country in the
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 1968 and 2018.
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, there were differences in the spending of their weekly income in both
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 as food was the most in the
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 1968
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 it changed to leisure in the
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 2018. The least expense was on fuel and power in both
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although
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 in the
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 2018 personal property was added into the least spending category. In the
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 1968, household expenditure on food reached 35% of their weekly income.
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, housing and clothing and footwear occupied 10% followed by leisure which was around 8% of their salary every week. At that time, there were three groups of outlay held approximately 7% of wages which were household equipment, personal goods and transport.
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, the minimal spent was on fuel and power. After 50
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, the single spending of weekly pay all decreased to the most spent was leisure around 22%. The inclination of the payout was on the category of housing to 18% and
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 on transport grew by about 7%. The household goods didn’t have any changes in these
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, the decline in the period happened to fuel and power, food and personal equipment as foods shrink to around 17% and personal furnishings dropped about 3%.
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, the clothing and footwear expense was half off.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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