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The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty line in three states in the USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty line in three states in the USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table compares and contrasts data on the
poverty
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 number in three different American sectors, namely
California
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,
Utah
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 and
Florida
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.
Overall
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, it is readily apparent that there are more young residents in
poverty
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 in
Utah
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,
while
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 those over 60 years old are more prevailed in
Florida
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.
Also
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, average income per person and
population
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 below
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poverty
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the poverty
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 line categories in
California
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 are generally highest in
California
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,
whereas
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 the opposite pattern is true for
Utah
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. First of all, in the category of young people under 18 living in
poverty
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,
Utah
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's number far outnumbers all other states, at 28%, followed by
California
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 and
Florida
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 by 17% and 16%, respectively.
Secondly
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, in terms of those aged over 60,
Florida
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 holds a lion's share of 23% of
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population
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the population
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,
California
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 stays at a relatively lower percentage at 13%, yet
Utah
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 witnessed a small proportion exactly at 8%. With regards to average income,
California
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 was recorded at $23,000,
Florida
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 slightly lower at $22,000, with $17,000 of average salary per
Utah
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 resident.
Furthermore
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,
California
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 has the largest
population
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 below
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poverty
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the poverty
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 line,
in contrast
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,
Utah
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's underdevelopment
population
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 stands the least.
Additionally
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, the category of
population
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 below
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poverty
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the poverty
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 line in
Florida
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 was higher than
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Utah
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in Utah
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, but smaller than
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California
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in California
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, with 12%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words poverty, california, utah, florida, population with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative analysis
  • Metrics
  • Economic conditions
  • Cost of living
  • Percentage
  • Poverty line
  • Demographics
  • Workforce composition
  • Income disparity
  • Correlation
  • Economic health
  • Social-economic challenges
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