Writing task 1 The table below shows the change in number of people engaged in various physical activities between the years 2001-2009 in Australia (in million people).
The given table illustrates the differences in
figure
for Australian citizens who took part in various sports namely running, aerobics, tennis, cycling and swimming over a period of 8 years from 2001.
Fix the agreement mistake
figures
Overall
, the most famous sport in the given period was cycling . By contrast
, tennis has the lowest participants
in the same period. Correct quantifier usage
number of participants
Also
, the maximum and minimum of
changes were for running and swimming respectively.
Between 2001 and 2009, cycling and swimming have the most popularity among Australian Change preposition
apply
people
from 4.5 to 3.6 and from 3.7 to 3.3 in million people
while
they have a -20% and -10% change. Als, Australian runners had the highest changes at 156%, and they reached 2.2 people
in million people
that
was 0.8 higher than that Correct pronoun usage
which
of
in 2001.Change preposition
apply
In addition
, there was a gradual increase in the number of nations who took part in aerobics of 1.7 ( 0.2 higher than first
year ). It is Correct article usage
the first
also
worth noting that tennis saw the least of participants from 1 to 1.2 and change
for them was 15%.Correct article usage
the change
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