Writing task 1 The table below shows the change in number of people engaged in various physical activities between the years 2001-2009 in Australia (in million people).

Writing task 1 

The table below shows the change in number of people engaged in various physical activities between the years 2001-2009 in Australia (in million people).
The given table illustrates the differences in
figure
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figures
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for Australian citizens who took part in various sports namely running, aerobics, tennis, cycling and swimming over a period of 8 years from 2001.
Overall
, the most famous sport in the given period was cycling .
By contrast
, tennis has the lowest
participants
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number of participants
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in the same period.
Also
, the maximum and minimum
of
Change preposition
apply
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changes were for running and swimming respectively. Between 2001 and 2009, cycling and swimming have the most popularity among Australian
people
from 4.5 to 3.6 and from 3.7 to 3.3 in million
people
while
they have a -20% and -10% change. Als, Australian runners had the highest changes at 156%, and they reached 2.2
people
in million
people
that
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which
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was 0.8 higher than that
of
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apply
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in 2001.
In addition
, there was a gradual increase in the number of nations who took part in aerobics of 1.7 ( 0.2 higher than
first
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the first
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year ). It is
also
worth noting that tennis saw the least of participants from 1 to 1.2 and
change
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the change
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for them was 15%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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