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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course.The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course.The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan
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The former chart gives information about
a university graduates
Correct the article-noun agreement
university graduates
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 when they finished their undergraduate degree subjects in Anthropology, and the latter table displays the wages of the anthropologists who started work for five years.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 over half of the graduates decided on full-time
jobs
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, and the other people chose part-time
jobs
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 and were unemployed. The aspect of salaries, a significant proportion is freelance consultants and the government sector, and
following
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followed
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 by private companies.
To begin
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 with, full-time
jobs
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 had the highest contribution for 52%, and
following
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the following
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 were part-time
jobs
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 and unemployed were 15% and 12% respectively.
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, Full-time postgrad study and not known got the same proportion of
this
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 chart was 8%. Freelance consultants and the government sector had a similar pattern of income proportion which was 5% for $25000-49999 and 15% for $50000-$74999.
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, 90% of both
also
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 had
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 income over $100,000. Private companies had different trends, the highest percentage of wages belonged to $50,000-74,999 for 35% and the
last
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 one was 10% for $25,000-49,999.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words jobs with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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