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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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The table indicates how many
graduate
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 and postgraduate
students
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 in Uk took part in different types of
work
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instead
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 of doing full-time jobs after leaving college in 2008.
Overall
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, there were more
students
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 who graduated than postgraduates in four types of
work
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 choices.
In addition
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,
further
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 study was the most popular destination two genres of
students
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 picked up among four kinds of orientation. At 29, 665 people, the number of
graduate
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students
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 who continued to follow their study path was nearly nine times as many as that of postgraduate pupils, with 2,725.
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, the year 2008 witnessed 17,735
graduate
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students
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 taking up part-time
work
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 in comparison with 2,535
students
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 postgraduating. Regarding the other sorts of jobs, only 345 people were postgraduates joining voluntary
work
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 whilst the figure for
graduate
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students
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 was significantly higher, at 3,500 pupils.
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, unemployment saw 16,235
graduate
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students
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 which was
also
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 considerably higher than that of postgraduate
students
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, at only 1,625 people.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduate, students, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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