You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the
tempereture
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temperature
diference
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difference
in each
days
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day
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since
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from
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January to December in two Australian cities and
bar
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the bar
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chart shows the number of
days
of
rainfall
in each
month
.
According to
the data, the
temperature
has
reported
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in
celcius
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celsius
degrees
and
selected
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the selected
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places were
Brisband
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Brisbane
and
Canbera
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Canberra
. It is
obvoius
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obvious
that
Brisband
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Brisbane
was the warmest city throughout the year.
According to
the chart,in January,
Brisband
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Brisbane
and
Canbera
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Canberra
had nearly
same
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the same
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temperature
although
both of these cities had huge
descrepancy
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discrepancy
of
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in
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temperature
in each
days
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day
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. At
Brisband
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Brisbane
,
maximum
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the maximum
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temperature
was just below 30 and
minimum
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the minimum
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was just above 20 in January
while
Canbera
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Canberra
had the highest value just below Brisbrand and the lowest value
in
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between 10-15.
However
, in
following
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the following
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month
,
Brisband
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Brisbane
had their peak level of
temperature
as 30
degrees
and 10
degrees
diference
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difference
was the
loweat
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lowest
level.
Canbera
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Canberra
had
same
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the same
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line of maximum and
the
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apply
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lowest
temperature
in
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this
month
.
In addition
,
Brisband
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Brisbane
had the lowest
temperature
in July and August and
that
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which
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was 10 whilst
Canbera
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Canberra
had just above 0 in June and July. In December, both cities were hot because they reached nearly 30
degrees
as highest with huge fluctuations in each
months
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month
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.
Secondly
,
Brisband
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Brisbane
had
highest
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the highest
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rainfall
in February and March and there was a reduction of rain in June, July and August and it
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increased when reached in December up to 12
days
.
Canbera
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Canberra
had 10
days
per
month
as maximum numbers in June, July and August
while
other months had
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the
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nearly
same
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the same
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number of
days
of
rainfall
. It is very clear that
Brisband
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Brisbane
had more
rainfall
than
Canbera
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Canberra
in
whole
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the whole
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year
beacuse
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because
each and every
month
there were more
days
than
Canbera
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words days, rainfall, month, temperature, degrees, brisband, canbera with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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