These days ,people work in more than one job ,and often change career several times during their life.What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Nowadays,taking a year out
people
prefer to
work
in different professions
instead
of just
one
profession.
In addition
to
this
people
are
also
expanding their careers.
However
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there are both pros and cons.In
this
essay ,I will discuss some of the reasons why
people
are changing their profession
besides
this
and I will give my own opinion in
this
essay. Let's begin by looking at the advantages
one
of the main positives of changing professions is broadens your horizons.What I mean by
this
changing professions is valuable for you and other
people
because if you
work
two
jobs
you will make many acquaintances,and you will learn many things or
job
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from them.
Secondly
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if you
work
many
jobs
it's good for your wallet too and your family will have a good life. Turning to the other side of
argument
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you may have
difficultly
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in
two
jobs
together with
that you will inability to get
along with
other colleague
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.it is
one
of
them
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major
problem
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.Another
one
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issue is you can't spend time with your family.From home to
work
from
work
to home and a day passes with
this
.
The most
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important you don't know how your children have grown up. All things
considered
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working
two
jobs
is never easy for you
two
work
two
jobs
.You will need great patience and strength.
Personally
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I believe the benefits in terms of personal growth eventually outweigh any negatives
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  • Skill diversification
  • Versatile
  • Professional network
  • Career advancement
  • Job satisfaction
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Market value
  • Job insecurity
  • Financial strain
  • Specialization
  • Adjustment periods
  • Unemployment
  • Deep expertise
  • Long-term benefits
  • Retirement plans
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