The pie chart beolw three regions ro les procuctive. The table shows how these causes afected the world during the 1990s. Summarise hte information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart beolw three regions ro les procuctive. The table shows how these causes afected

the world during the 1990s.

Summarise hte information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The shown pie chart shows the percentages of causes of worldwide
land
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degradations
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degradation
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during
1990s
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the 1990s
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, which are the three countries
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north
America
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,
Europe
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, and Oceania. The three
cause
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causes
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of
degradation
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are
deforestation
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, over-grazing,
over cultivation
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over-cultivation
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, and others.     As can be seen that the lowest total
land
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degraded
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rate
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is the North
America
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about 5%. North
America
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, got a very small proportion
in
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of
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deforestation
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0.2%.
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percentage doesn't
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that much.
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to
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, the over cultivation
rate
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is an insignificant minority 3.3 only%.
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, what about
over grazing
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overgrazing
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rate
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is 1.5%, it can be clearly seen that the
ratios
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ratio
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degradation
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in
the
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North
America
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doesn't
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count
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,
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Europe
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Europe's
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total
land
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degraded
it
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is considered the highest
rate
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that
include
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23%. The most harmful came from
deforestation
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it
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reached
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9.8%.
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why agricultural
land
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becomes less productive. We have to spread awareness through social media to reduce
land
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degradation
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in
Europe
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.
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, Oceania
over grazing
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overgrazing
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(11.3) is the most
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apply
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cases
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the cases
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of worldwide
land
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degradation
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, and the
others
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other's
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land
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degraded
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degradation
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rates
not
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are not
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even above 2%.  
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Europe
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suffered more from farmland
degradation
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than the other regions and the main causes there were
deforestation
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and over-cultivation.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words land, america, europe, degradation, deforestation, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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