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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Introduction
English
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 has
became
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 an international and people of different countries communicate in
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English
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the English
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language
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 around the world.
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 those who cannot understand and speak
English
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,
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apply
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 can learn.
Body paragraph 1
English
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 course. whether online or offline.
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There are some important reasons why we should learn
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. As everyone is interested in growing, business but if
vou
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you
 want to take your business
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at
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an
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 international level
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 you must know
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 which is used in transactions, communication etc.
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Such
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schoolis
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schools
school is
 conducted in
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. So students must know at least
basics
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the basics
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 of
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 so that they may continue their studies without any problem. If you've started learning
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, don't get discouraged when things become difficult. Strive to master the
language
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 and you'll be reaping rewards
in
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on time
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If you are looking for
job
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a job
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then
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 speaking
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 will be
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a plus
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 point and you will not face any kind of problems
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 giving
interview
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an interview
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 for any job. I don't think there is an escape from the inevitability of
English
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 as a global dialect, yet we need to find a harmonious balance so that our local dialects flourish.
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This
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language
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 is very much
helpfulfor
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helpful for
 you when you are
traveling
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in
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other place
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another place
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 where the people have their regional
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 and you don't know about their
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. If will be helpful in reducing your stress
while
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 communication
Conclusion
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last
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, I can say that if you want to get
success
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 in your life
then
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 learning
English
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 should be your first step and you need not
to
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be worried about going anywhere because so many
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 online
course
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courses
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 which you can learn easily and become fluent in speaking
English
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.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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