It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort o f punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?
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right or wrong, it may lead to a tragedy. Like my nephew, my auntie really over-spoiled him. Wrong verb form
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help
him with no Wrong verb form
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and distinction and said sorry to his classmate and said that she will pay for his mistake. When my nephew has grown
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punishment
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