It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort o f punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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I agree that it is important for

children

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to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. In my experience, if

children

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know what kind

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behave

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right or wrong, it may lead to a tragedy. Like my nephew, my auntie really over-spoiled him.

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, one day my nephew broke his classmate’s bottles, he

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even say sorry to his classmate and he just cried and said that wasn’t his fault, after that when the school teacher called my auntie, my auntie just

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him with no

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and distinction and said sorry to his classmate and said that she will pay for his mistake. When my nephew

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up, he made a similar mistake, he

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wouldn’t

realize that it was his fault and

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apologize. Based on

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story, I think

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punishment

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is necessary to help

children

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who get in trouble to learn the distinction.

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, I think physical

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is permit

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the parents to teach good behaviour to

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, but it’s not a way to teach. I think the best way for both parents and teacher were the

punishment

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of restricting

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children

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to use

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from using

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their mobile phone or other 3C appliances

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because my little brother will listen to my mother’s words

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if my mother says that she might take away his mobile phone when my little brother does the wrong things. In conclusion,

children

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learn right and wrong

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an early age is really important, and sometimes

punishment

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is necessary to help them know it properly.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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