The line graph below illustrates the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton over a period of 30 years between 1980 and 2010.

The line graph below illustrates the

percentage

of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton over a period of 30 years between 1980 and 2010.

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,during the period 1980 and 2010 the favourite attractions for tourists were the art gallery and Pavilion,the least popular place was

pier

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the pier

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. As is presented in the graph,the

percentage

of visitors to

Pavilion

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the Pavilion

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gradually increased between 1985 and 1995,from 28% to 51%.

However

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then

it decreased significantly,to about 37% in 2000 and

then

to 31% in 2010.Only 10% of tourists visited

to

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Pier in 1980,

then

this

persentage

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percentage

was

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alightly

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slightly

a lightly

lightly

fluctuated and increased to 28% in 2010. The most popular attraction in 1980 was

festival

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the festival

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,almost 31% of these attended

this

attraction,

by

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2010

this

percentage

was decreased to 25%. The highest

percentage

of visitors in 1985

shown

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in the Art gallery.There was a significant rise from 21% to 32%. It is

noticible

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noticeable

that the least popular attraction was Pier all over the period than the other attractions.