The line graph below illustrates the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton over a period of 30 years between 1980 and 2010.

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The line graph below illustrates the

percentage

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of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton over a period of 30 years between 1980 and 2010.

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,during the period 1980 and 2010 the favourite attractions for tourists were the art gallery and Pavilion,the least popular place was

pier

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the pier

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. As is presented in the graph,the

percentage

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of visitors to

Pavilion

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the Pavilion

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were

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apply

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gradually increased between 1985 and 1995,from 28% to 51%.

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However

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then

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it decreased significantly,to about 37% in 2000 and

then

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to 31% in 2010.Only 10% of tourists visited

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apply

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Pier in 1980,

then

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this

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persentage

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percentage

was

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apply

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alightly

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slightly

a lightly

lightly

fluctuated and increased to 28% in 2010. The most popular attraction in 1980 was

festival

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the festival

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,almost 31% of these attended

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attraction,

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and by

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2010

this

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percentage

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was decreased to 25%. The highest

percentage

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of visitors in 1985

shown

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was shown

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in the Art gallery.There was a significant rise from 21% to 32%. It is

noticible

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noticeable

that the least popular attraction was Pier all over the period than the other attractions.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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4 paragraphs

163 words

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The line graph below illustrates the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton over a period of 30 years between 1980 and 2010.

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year .

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. It is important for all towns and cities to have large public outdoor places like squares and parks. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? You should write at least 250 words.

Some people think our first impression of someone is important, while others think we should not judge another person so quickly and should take our time to know them better. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some people say that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age of driving motorbikes or cars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?